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## Elements of Strong Prose

### Voice
```
Voice = Word choice + Rhythm + Perspective + Attitude

Questions to find your voice:
- Who is telling this story?
- What do they notice first?
- How would they describe things?
- What words would they never use?
```

### Rhythm and Flow
```
Vary sentence length:

Short sentences create tension. They punch. They move fast.

Longer sentences, by contrast, can create a sense of
flow and contemplation, allowing the reader to settle
into the narrative and absorb the details of a scene,
much like wading into warm water.

Mix them. That's the key.
```

## Show vs. Tell

### The Difference
```
TELLING: "She was nervous about the interview."

SHOWING: "She smoothed her skirt for the fifth time.
Her coffee sat untouched, growing cold. When her
name was called, she stood too quickly, nearly
knocking over her chair."
```

### When to Tell
```
- Transitions between scenes
- Summarizing time passage
- Background information
- When showing would slow pace
```

### When to Show
```
- Key emotional moments
- Important character traits
- Conflict and tension
- Scenes that matter
```

## Sensory Writing

### The Five Senses
```
Sight: Colors, shapes, light, movement
Sound: Dialogue, ambient noise, silence
Touch: Texture, temperature, pressure
Smell: Scents that trigger memory
Taste: Flavors that ground scenes
```

### Sensory Exercise
```
Describe a place using:
- 3 visual details
- 2 sounds
- 1 smell
- 1 touch/texture
- 1 taste (if applicable)
```

## Figurative Language

### Metaphor
```
Implicit comparison:
"Time is a thief."
"Her words were daggers."
"The city was a maze of possibilities."
```

### Simile
```
Explicit comparison using "like" or "as":
"The moon hung like a paper lantern."
"Silence fell as heavy as snow."
```

### Personification
```
Giving human qualities to non-human things:
"The wind whispered through the trees."
"The house groaned in the storm."
```

### Fresh vs. Cliché
```
Cliché: "Her heart sank."
Fresh: "Something in her chest dropped like a stone in still water."

Cliché: "Time flies."
Fresh: "The hours dissolved like sugar in rain."
```

## Word Choice

### Concrete vs. Abstract
```
Abstract: "She felt sad about the loss."
Concrete: "She ran her thumb along his empty coffee cup,
still warm."

Choose:
- Specific nouns over general
- Active verbs over passive
- Concrete over abstract
```

### Power Verbs
```
Instead of: walked
Try: strode, shuffled, ambled, trudged, crept, bounded

Instead of: said
Try: whispered, snapped, murmured, announced, confessed
(But "said" is often invisible and best)
```

## Scene Construction

### Scene Elements
```
1. Goal: What does the POV character want?
2. Conflict: What's in the way?
3. Outcome: What happens? (often a setback)
4. Reaction: How do they respond?
5. Decision: What will they do next?
```

### Scene Openings
```
- Start with action
- Start with dialogue
- Start with sensory detail
- Start in medias res (middle of things)

Avoid:
- Character waking up
- Weather descriptions
- Lengthy backstory
```

## Dialogue

### Natural Dialogue
```
- People interrupt
- People don't answer directly
- People speak in fragments
- People have verbal tics
- People avoid what they mean
```

### Subtext
```
What's said ≠ What's meant

"Nice weather."
(I don't want to talk about what just happened.)

"You look tired."
(Are you okay? I'm worried about you.)
```

## Revision Techniques

### First Pass: Structure
```
- Does each scene advance plot or character?
- Is the pacing right?
- Are transitions smooth?
```

### Second Pass: Prose
```
- Eliminate weak verbs (was, were, is, are)
- Cut adverbs, strengthen verbs
- Remove redundancies
- Vary sentence structures
```

### Third Pass: Polish
```
- Read aloud for rhythm
- Check for clichés
- Ensure consistency
- Final grammar/spelling
```

## Style Exercises

### Constraint Writing
```
- Write a scene using only dialogue
- Describe without using "was/were"
- Limit paragraphs to 3 sentences
- Use no adjectives
```

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